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The Line graph illustrates the number of UK daily users of different transportation over the period of 60 years.

The Line graph illustrates the number of UK daily users of different transportation over the period of 60 years.
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The graph demonstrates how UK citizens used different types of transportation, with a prediction for the future decade until 2030.
Overall
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, it is evident from the data that cars were the most preferable form of transport and even the
number
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 of drivers
are
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is
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 expected to increase.
However
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, buses were steadily losing
there
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their
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 position throughout the period. It is interesting to note that, the
number
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 of commuters that had a car increased in
period
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the period
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 from 1980 until 2000. After growing, the
number
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 of car users remained stable for the decade.
However
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, 2010 witnessed an incline for approximately half a million drivers. The public transport commuters
were tend
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tended
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 to choose buses rather than trains back in 1970,
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however
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 it is predicted to be changed. Throughout
all
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apply
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the given period the
number
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 of bus users slowly decreased, and had reached the point of 3,2
millions
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million
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 users by 2020.
On the other hand
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, the partition of train commuters increased and even projected to incline.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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