The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit

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The pie chart one illustrates data regarding the percentage of people travelling to Ireland in terms of their age groups for

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year,

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the second one gives information about the gender of the visitors and why they visited

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country.Units are measured in percentages.

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,what stands out from the graphs is that the age of the largest percentage of people who arrived in İreland varied between 25-34 and 45-54.

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, most people came to Ireland for leisure,not business. Looking into detail,those whose age changed between 25-34 and 45-54 comprised the highest proportion with approximately one-fourth.The share of 35-44-year-old travellers ranked second with just under 20%

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Other groups were less inclined to visit Ireland and they all together were responsible for about one-third. With regard to another chart,it is noticeable that leisure was the most contributing factor that attracts men and women to come to

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country with 40% and 43% respectively.Meanwhile, 4% of females and 13% of males visited because of business.

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The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit

Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case?what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?