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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the information about the average highest
temperature
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 of a day in two different
cities
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 in New Zealand and
United
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the United
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Kingom
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Kingdom
 in twelve months. The types of information are categorized into
Auckland
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,
Christchurch
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,
London
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 and
Edinburgh
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
cities
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 in the UK experience warmer
condition
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conditions
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 in the middle of the
year
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 , as begin and end with
the
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apply
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colder
condition
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conditions
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, compared to those in New Zealand.
London
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 and
Edingburgh
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Edinburgh
 start the
year
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 with approximately 5
degrees
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.The climate patterns of
London
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 and
Edinburgh
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 followed
the
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a
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 similar pattern, the
temperature
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 gradually
rise
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rose
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 in the first half of the
year
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.
Although
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London
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 has more hotter climate compared to
Edinburgh
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. In both
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Cities
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Cities,
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 the highest peak is between July and August, with nearly 22
degrees
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 in
London
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 and 18
degrees
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 in
Edinburgh
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. From September to November, it shows a steady decrease until it met
at
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the same figure, with nearly 6
degrees
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, in December.
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,
Auckland
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 and
Christchurch
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experience
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experienced
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 the highest
temperature
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 at the beginning of the
year
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, at approximately 24 and 22, respectively. After that, the
temperature
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 moderately
reduce
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 from February to June until dip into the lowest point in July, at about 15 in
Auckland
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 and 12 in
Christchurch
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. From September both
cities
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 are getting colder every month.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the
year
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,
Auckland
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 has comparatively less cold than
Christchurch
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 by having temperatures around 22.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, cities, auckland, christchurch, london, edinburgh, year, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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