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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that
undergraduated
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undergraduate
students
 want to learn diverse
subjects
beside
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 their main
subjects
 and others think that they should spend all
time
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their time
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on
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apply
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studying for a qualification. In my opinion, two aspects have
disvantages
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disadvantages
 and advantages. In terms of studying different
subjects
,
students
 may have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to know and understand knowledge
widly
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widely
.
Furthermore
,
this
also
help
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undergraduated
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undergraduates
undergraduate
 to enhance their personal skills.
For example
, when studying physical
subjects
,
students
 can improve their health and they can
also
 feel less stress after their main classes.
Moreover
, open-minded, critical thinking may be created after learning diverse
subjects
.
On the other hand
, focusing on a main subject
provide
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students
a
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deeply understand
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about
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of
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 the knowledge.
Therefore
, they will
have
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a
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apply
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well prepared for their job in the future.
For example
,
students
 spend most of their time on a qualification, they will not be distracted by other
subjects
 and spend time
on
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apply
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learning and researching their
subjects
 thoroughly and
this
 will bring good results in finding a job in the future. In conclusion, both
of
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views have
disavantages
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disadvantages
 and advantages so we need to combine both of them to get and achieve the end.
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task response
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coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, aim to enhance the logical flow of your essay. You could achieve this by using a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively. Also, consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly, with each one focusing on a single main idea.
general
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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