The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about passed driving
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cities
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men
and women
.
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the whole
women's
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women
been
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test
and have been showing
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a high
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of Correct your spelling
instead
men's
in that country.
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men
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1980
about 48% of the female Add a comma
1980,
test
takers passed his
driving Correct pronoun usage
their
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, which is higher
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a higher
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with
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to
male's
with 29%, Change noun form
males
this
means almost two times less than women's
.
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women
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the passing
female's
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females'
test
passing ability is
rose slowly Unnecessary verb
apply
where
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apply
it
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apply
shows
about 51% and reached the Wrong verb form
showing
pick
in 2000, Correct your spelling
peak
where
about 69% of female Correct word choice
when
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taker
passed the Fix the agreement mistake
takers
test
at this
time.
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women
test
in 2010 decrease
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decreased
with
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by
year
2000.
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the year
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addition
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men
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