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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and bar chart describe the sources of
income
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 and outcome of the police budget of Britain in a period of 2 years. It is noticeable that the biggest
income
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 of the police budget in both years
is
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was
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 from
national
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the national
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 government,
while
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 most
money
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 was spent on
salaries
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the salaries
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 of officers and staff. Looking into more
details
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detail
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, the
income
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 from local taxes saw a
dramatically
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dramatic
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raise
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rise
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 during the years, which gained 102.3
million
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 a year
comparing
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compared
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 to 91.2
million
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 in 2017.
However
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, the
income
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 of
national
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the national
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 government and other sources only increased
less
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by less
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 than 3
million
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.
Overall
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, the total
income
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 gained a 13.9
million
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 raise. In terms of the
spendings
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spending
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, the proportion of
money
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spend
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spent
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 on technology almost doubled from 2017 to 2018,
while
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 the amount of
money
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spend
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spent
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 on salaries of officers and staff gently declined. The
mount
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amount
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 of
money
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 spent on buildings and transport,
however
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, remained steady at 17%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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