The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates what UK
graduate
and postgraduate Use synonyms
students
who did not go into Use synonyms
full time
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full-time
job
did after leaving college Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
during
2008. Job perspectives Change preposition
in
divided
into four fields which were described number of Add a missing verb
were divided
students
.
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Overall
, among Linking Words
graduate
and postgraduate Use synonyms
students
, there was a tendency Use synonyms
of
increase in Change preposition
to
further
study section and they were likely to attend the least in voluntary Linking Words
work
. Part-time Use synonyms
work
and unemployment Use synonyms
situation
had much more Fix the agreement mistake
situations
differency
.
Correct your spelling
difference
In the
first chart, Change preposition
The
it
showed Correct pronoun usage
apply
graduate
Use synonyms
students
’ research in 2008, Use synonyms
further
study was the highest compared to others which was 29665 and the voluntary Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
bottomed-out
at 3500. Unemployment and part-time Correct your spelling
bottomed out
work
were in parallel at 16235 and 17735 respectively. Use synonyms
Finally
, in the second chart, postgraduate Linking Words
students
tended to do Use synonyms
further
study and part-time Linking Words
work
which differed from Use synonyms
graduate
Use synonyms
students
at 2725 and 2535. The lowest was voluntary Use synonyms
work
at the rate of 345 Use synonyms
students
and Use synonyms
unemployment
Correct article usage
the unemployment
students
Use synonyms
were
1625.Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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