The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates what UK
graduate
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and postgraduate
students
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who did not go into
full time
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full-time
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job
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jobs
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did after leaving college
during
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in
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2008. Job perspectives
divided
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were divided
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into four fields which were described number of
students
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.
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, among
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and postgraduate
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, there was a tendency
of
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to
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increase in
further
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study section and they were likely to attend the least in voluntary
work
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. Part-time
work
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and unemployment
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had much more
differency
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difference
.
In the
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first chart,
it
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apply
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showed
graduate
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students
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’ research in 2008,
further
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study was the highest compared to others which was 29665 and the voluntary
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bottomed-out
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at 3500. Unemployment and part-time
work
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were in parallel at 16235 and 17735 respectively.
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, in the second chart, postgraduate
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tended to do
further
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study and part-time
work
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which differed from
graduate
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students
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at 2725 and 2535. The lowest was voluntary
work
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at the rate of 345
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and
unemployment
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the unemployment
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students
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were
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1625.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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