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Your employer has recently allowed some employees to work remotely from home. You would also like to work from home. Write a letter to the HR manager for permission to work from home for the next six months. In your letter, mention why you are writing explain why you would like to work from home say how this can benefit you and the company

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to seek your permission to allow me to
work
form
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from
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 home. I believe
this
 arrangement of
the
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apply
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work
 will foster my productivity. As you may know, I live at
far
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a far
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 away distance from the office
due to
 some family issues. Commuting
everyday
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 to and from
job
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my job
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waste
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wastes
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 a lot of
time
 for me.
Moreover
, it
also
 results in spiked stress
level
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. I
frimly
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firmly
 believe getting a golden opportunity to
work
 from home will save me
mine
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my
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time
 and dissipate the stress. Because
for
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of
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 the extra
time
 and reduced stress, I can perform better and effectively.
Lastly
, if you allow me to
work
remortly
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remotely
, it will benefit me unequivocally.
On the other
hand
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 it will introduce
few
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a few
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 possible advantages for the company, first is increased productivity.
Second
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 benefit will
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be employees
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employees
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employees'
employee's
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 well-being
,
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apply
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 because
this
 new facet of
work
 will allow them to spend more
time
 with family. I hope you will consider my request and
accomodate
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accommodate
 it in
timely
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a timely
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 manner. Looking forward
your
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to your
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 reply. yours faithfully, John rick.
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Spelling
Make sure to proofread your letter for any spelling mistakes, such as 'form' instead of 'from', to further improve its clarity.
Coherence
To increase coherence, consider using transition words or phrases between sentences to ensure a smoother flow of ideas.
Cohesion
To enhance cohesion, remember to develop and conclude each idea within its own paragraph, maintaining a clear focus throughout the letter.
Task Response
When expressing benefits to the company, include specific examples or scenarios where possible, to strengthen your argument.
Task Response
You have effectively communicated the main purpose of your letter and presented clear reasons for wanting to work from home.
Structure
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Writing Tone
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for its purpose.

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