The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A quick glance at the charts
illustrate
a number of graduate and postgraduate Change the verb form
illustrates
students
in the UK who finished college in 2008 and then
did part-time, volunteering, further
study and unemployment instead
of attempting full-time work
.
Overall
, number
of postgraduate Change the article
a number
the number
Students
was nowhere near as large as graduate students
. Moreover
, although
for collegiate students
, part-time work
was the most popular and accounted for the highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder students
who did voluntary work
.
In terms of the first chart, most students
chose further
study which considered almost all graduate students
. However
, the difference between the greatest work
and the slightest work
was very huge and it was highly likely to unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity.
With regards to describing the second chart, short-term work
was not quite as large as further
study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate students
included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering work
could not involve a range of postgraduate students
because it was only 345 students
.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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