The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A quick glance at the charts
illustrate
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a number of graduate and postgraduate
students
in the UK who finished college in 2008 and
then
did part-time, volunteering,
further
study and unemployment
instead
of attempting full-time
work
.
Overall
,
number
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a number
the number
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of postgraduate
Students
was nowhere near as large as graduate
students
.
Moreover
,
although
for collegiate
students
, part-time
work
was the most popular and accounted for the highest rate, it was less by approximately 1000 than the lowest amount of degree holder
students
who did voluntary
work
. In terms of the first chart, most
students
chose
further
study which considered almost all graduate
students
.
However
, the difference between the greatest
work
and the slightest
work
was very huge and it was highly likely to unemployment and could not show big unsimilarity. With regards to describing the second chart, short-term
work
was not quite as large as
further
study even though both were the biggest indicators. 1625 postgraduate
students
included joblessness which was third the greatest sector, controversly, volunteering
work
could not involve a range of postgraduate
students
because it was only 345
students
.
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