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More and more city workers are deciding to live in the country and travel into work everyday. The result is increased traffic congestion and damadge to the environment. What measures do you think could be taken to encourage people not to travel such long distance to work?

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Increasing
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 number of employers in
city
areas
 are travelling to work from their village's
everyday
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 results in
growth
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the growth
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 of traffic and increases environmental pollution.
Creation
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The creation
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 of low rental housing projects in urban
areas
, and
increase
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an increase
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 in the road
tax
 would be good initiatives to overcome
this
 problem.
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eassy
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, the writer
intend
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 to
ellaborate
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elaborate
 above ideas,in detail. To commence with, authorities have to
impliment
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implement
 low rental housing
schems
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schemes
scheme
 around these commercial
areas
 to facilitate quick access to their work environment . The biggest burden for
city
 employers is the higher cost
for
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of
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 their living places.
Thus
 most of them select to live in their native places and used to travel to cities daily .
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,
according to
 a recent
reserch
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research
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the university
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university
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 of Oxford nearly 70% of London workers spend their monthly income on housing.
Thus
 ,
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
house
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housing
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cost
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costs
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 with government
involment
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involvement
,
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would be the best attraction to encourage the workers to live near
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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commercial
areas
.
Furthermore
, followed by the above initiative,
increase
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an increase
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 in the road
tax
 would be the
secound
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second
 best option to
controle travell related
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control travel-related
 environmental and public issues. Upliftment of
excisting
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existing
tax
 percentages or generation of new taxes ,to drivers who use roads,
specially
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especially
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 in peak hours in
city
areas
 would discourage them from travelling.
For instance
, with the introduction of road
tax
 in London in 2002, it was reported a huge reduction in amount of vehicles; which entered
to
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apply
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the
city
 of
london
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London
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 from outside
areas
.
Therefore
,
tax
 can play a
crusual
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crucial
 role in
controling
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controlling
 the above problem. In conclusion,
generation
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the generation
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 of new living places with low rentals in
city
areas
 and
introduction
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the introduction
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 of
tax
 schemes for vehicle usage in
city
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the city
a city
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area
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areas
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,
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apply
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would be good initiatives for the above problems.
However
,
this
 writer observes that
,
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 governing bodies have to generate solutions in a proper and planned manner
not
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so as not
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 to overburden the workforce of
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the
a
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country.
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