The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate about percentage of
water
usage for three different sectors likewise
industrial, agricultural and domestic in countries ( including North America
, South America
, Europe
, Africa, Central Asia
and South East Asia
) of the earth.
Overall
, there were
Change the verb form
was
significant
proportion of countries Add an article
a significant
used
Correct pronoun usage
that used
water
for agricultural purpose
Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
except
North Add the preposition
except for
America
and Europe
which two countries mainly brought water
for industrial fields.
According to
the graphs, South America
, Africa, Central Asia
and South East Asia
accounted considerably 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively.Also
more Add a comma
Also,
water
usage state was Central Asia
.
Furthermore
, North America
used raw water
for industrial use and 53% of proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
outweigh
Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
for
Change preposition
apply
Europe
.It was main
industrial Correct article usage
the main
useage
regime.
Correct your spelling
usage
Moreover
, third
smallest usage sector was domestic Correct article usage
the third
useage
just below 20% all over the globe.South Correct your spelling
usage
America
at 19% and nearly 15% ,13% percentages by Europe
and North Africa.Remain same proportion 7
% among Central Add a missing verb
is 7
Asia
and South East Asia
.Submitted by nimeshafernando126 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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