The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate about percentage of
water
usage for three different sectors
likewise
industrial, agricultural and domestic in countries ( including North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
) of the earth.
Overall
, there
were
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was
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significant
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a significant
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proportion of countries
used
Correct pronoun usage
that used
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water
for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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except
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except for
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North
America
and
Europe
which two countries mainly brought
water
for industrial fields.
According to
the graphs, South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
accounted considerably 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively.
Also
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more
water
usage state was Central
Asia
.
Furthermore
, North
America
used raw
water
for industrial use and 53% of
proportion
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the proportion
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outweigh
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outweighs
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for
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apply
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Europe
.It was
main
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the main
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industrial
useage
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usage
regime.
Moreover
,
third
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the third
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smallest usage sector was domestic
useage
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usage
just below 20% all over the globe.South
America
at 19% and nearly 15% ,13% percentages by
Europe
and North Africa.Remain same proportion
7
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% among Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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