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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate about percentage of
water
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 usage for three different sectors
likewise
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 industrial, agricultural and domestic in countries ( including North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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) of the earth.
Overall
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, there
were
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was
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significant
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a significant
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 proportion of countries
used
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that used
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water
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 for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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except
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except for
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 North
America
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 and
Europe
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 which two countries mainly brought
water
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 for industrial fields.
According to
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 the graphs, South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 accounted considerably 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively.
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Also
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Also,
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 more
water
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 usage state was Central
Asia
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.
Furthermore
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, North
America
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 used raw
water
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 for industrial use and 53% of
proportion
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the proportion
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outweigh
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outweighs
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for
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apply
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Europe
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.It was
main
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the main
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 industrial
useage
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usage
 regime.
Moreover
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,
third
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the third
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 smallest usage sector was domestic
useage
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usage
 just below 20% all over the globe.South
America
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 at 19% and nearly 15% ,13% percentages by
Europe
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 and North Africa.Remain same proportion
7
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is 7
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% among Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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