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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects at universities in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society

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In the
last
 decade, more and more students prefer to take
art
subjects
instead
 of
science
 at universities.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
science
subjects
 are considered boring and do not appeal to young people.
In addition
, they believe that these
subjects
 are difficult to score.
Therefore
, the impacts on communities are that there will be a lack of
science
 experts in the
country
 and foreigners are needed to
work
 in sectors involving
science
 and technology. First and foremost, boredom is the main reason youngsters refuse to take up
science
major
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 at universities. It is said that
science
subjects
 are dull and difficult to comprehend.
For example
,
survey
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a survey
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 shows that
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majority of young Turkish prefer to major in the
art
 fields.
This
 is because they believe that they could do better in these fields than
science
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in science
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.
Consequently
, the number of students who register in
art
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the art
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sectors
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sector
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increases
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 dramatically over the
last
 few years,
while
science
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the science
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 field saw a significant decrease. The implications of these on the communities are that there would be
insufficient
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an insufficient
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 number of
science
 experts among the locals and the
country
has
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would have
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 to rely on foreign workers to
work
 in
science
 and
technology related
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technology-related
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 jobs.
In other words
, with the influx
art
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of art
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 graduates in the job market, there will be a shortage of those who could
work
 in
science
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the science
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 sector.
Hence
, the
country
 is forced to hire foreigners. Take
for
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, for
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 instance, most locals in Saudi Arabia choose to do
art related
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art-related
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subjects
 at
tertiary
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the tertiary
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 level.
As a result
, the government has to recruit foreign workers to
work
 as doctors, nurses and engineers in the
country
. In conclusion, the high level of difficulty in
science
subjects
 and being bored with them are the main contributing factors
why
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 students prefer to take up
art
subjects
 at universities.
Thus
, these lead to
the
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a
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 decrease in the number of local experts in
science
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the science
a science
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 field and
force
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forces
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 a
country
 to take foreigners to
work
 in
this
 field.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to make the text more engaging.
Task Response
To improve, aim to integrate a wider variety of vocabulary related to science and art subjects.
Task Response
Include more specific examples or data to support your points, such as citing specific surveys or studies.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have structured your essay well, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
Your essay effectively addresses both parts of the question (reasons and effects) in a comprehensive manner.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lack of interest
  • Motivation
  • Perceived difficulty
  • Career guidance
  • Diverse opportunities
  • Social media influence
  • Trendy fields
  • Outdated curriculum
  • Modern relevance
  • Engagement
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • Public health
  • Innovation
  • Sustainability
  • Skilled workforce
  • Knowledge economy
  • Research and development
  • Scientific literacy
  • Global competitiveness
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