The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
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The line graph illustrates the number of people changing from the year 2000 to
present
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the present
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with previsions for growth to 2050. The unit on the Y-axis is shown in the total
population
in billions.
Overall
, it can be seen that in the early
year
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of the period, China had more
population
than India.
However
, as a projection in 2050, the growth of
a
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population
in India will overtake China. Chinese people accounted for 1250
billion
in 2000 and slightly rose up to well over 1400
billion
in the present day. After that, it will be predicted to moderately increase by 50 in 2030,
then
will minimally fall back to
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1400
billions
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billion
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in the year 2050.
On the contrary
, the number of people in India, which accounted for nearly 1000
billion
at the start of the period,
was
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surged to just over 1300
billion
in 2020.
Moreover
, the growth of
population
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the population
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is expected to continuously surge and reach a peak at 1600
billion
in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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