The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates some changes
about
the percentage of Change preposition
in
people
born in Australia
and people
who were born outside Australia
living in urban, rural and town
between 1995 and 2010.
Fix the agreement mistake
towns
Overall
, the statistic
of Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
public
who Add an article
the public
are
born in cities 1995 in witnessed an upward trend over a period of 15 years. Wrong verb form
were
In contrast
, there was a downward trend in newborns in town between 1995 and 2010.
In 1995, people
born in Australia
and outside Australia
were the highest figures, accounting for 50 percent
and 60 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, respectively. Not only was the highest ratio in 1995 but Change the spelling
per cent
also
the percentage of who were born in cities in 2010. In addition
,there were few developments in terms of people
who were given birth both inside and outside this
nation, in 2010, making up around 65 percent
and 80 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, for each. A striking feature is that the percentage of newborn babies outside Change the spelling
per cent
this
country reached the peak of 80 percent
in 2010.
There was an Change the spelling
per cent
overall
downward trend in figures for all levels of giving birth in other groups such
as towns and rural areas throughout the period shown .Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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