the graphs show basic information about employment
The information about the number of males and females who
employed
in different countries from 1995 to 2005 is depicted by the rendered bar representation. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
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, it can be vividly manifested that the figures of women experienced a downward trend throughout the whole period, Linking Words
while
men can be seen with an upward trend till the end of the period.
Upon initial examination of the chart, it is evident that a tremendous disparity was noticed in the ratio of girls and boys in Australia in 1995 which was around 50% and 30%, Linking Words
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and female employers was nearly 70% and 39% in 2005, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
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analysis reveals that the percentile of gentlemen in Switzerland in 1995 was 65% which was followed by ladies with 53%, whilst there had been a difference of 10% between the both Linking Words
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more
proportion of male workers was observed in Iceland, 70%, than female workers with 40%.
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fraction of men in 2005 was apparent in Add an article
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UK
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the UK
Newzealand
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New Zealand
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the USA
acconted
for 70% each. Henceforward, a negligible incline could be seen in the numbers of males in 1995 in UK, Correct your spelling
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females underwent flux in three nations in 1995 and 2005.Change preposition
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