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Part 1 esc The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of three unhealthy nutrients at meals
on
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 four different times eaten.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the biggest time-consuming bad ingredients are when dinner and snacks.
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, the lowest percentage of eating unhealthy food is during breakfast. In terms of the biggest contributor,
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 dinner is the highest time when eating unhealthy food with three ingredients at 37% for saturated fat and 43%, it is snacks which have the most added sugar contributing to 42%. It is
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 followed by lunch for sodium and saturated fat at 29% and 26%, respectively. Regarding the other time with
a more
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more health food
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health
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healthy
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 food, breakfast consistently gives around 16% of unhealthy meals.
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, during
lunch
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lunch,
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 there are only two categories with a lower percentage which are sodium and saturated flat at 14% and 21%, respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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