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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates information about the number of international tourists to three different areas in a European country from 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the lake attracted the most
visitors
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 in
this
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 period.
However
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, the mountain is the least popular place among these 3 categories. The figure
of
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for
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 all tourist attractions increased in 20 years. In 1987, the number of
visitors
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 to the lakes was the least at 10000.
In contrast
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, the total of tourists to the coast was at 40000, which was the highest. In 1992, the number of
visitors
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 to the lake was similar to the total of attractions on the mountain. From 1987 to 2007, the lake rose sharply from 10000 to 75000 in the next 20 years.
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, the figure of foreigners to the mountain fluctuated between around 20000 and 35000 in
this
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 period.
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, the mountains were gradually sloping, and in 1987 there were 20000
visitors
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, and about 35000
visitors
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 a year.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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