During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met • tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear
sir
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or
madam
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, Do you remember me? We met
last
week during the plane holidays.
Then
you suggested
me
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if
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that if
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I must a
part time
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part-time
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job
, I may contact you about
job
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the job
a job
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. I am a student and I study "
Gulistan
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At gulistan
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state university" . Living in the
gulistan
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Gulistan
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is expensive and I need extra money to cover my living expenses. I can not work
full time
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, as I
heve
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have
lesson
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in the morning, so I decided to find
part time
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a part-time
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job
. I have
a
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apply
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experience of working
in
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as
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a waiter.
Last
year
i
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I
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spent six months as a waiter in "Dunyo cafe".
Futhermore
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Furthermore
I believe I possess all the necessary personal qualities for the post. I am hard-working , honest and reliable. I think I would be suitable
job
is
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as
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Manager. Because I am sociable and creative. I like challenging work. I am
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an adabtable
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adabtable
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adaptable
person. If you have a chance , I will try I am looking forward to replaying to you soon. Yours faithfully, Zuxriddin Kenjayev.
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Remember to include a specific job title when referring to the job you're interested in to make your intent clearer.
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Try to maintain a consistent formal tone throughout your letter. Avoid informal phrases such as 'Do you remember me?' in formal letters.
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the topic (e.g., introduction, job interest, qualifications, conclusion).
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal salutation ('Dear Sir/Madam' or 'Dear [Name]') when addressing someone you met professionally.
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You effectively reminded the reader of your previous interaction and explained your current situation and needs.
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You provided a brief explanation of your experience and qualities that make you suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
Your concluding paragraph neatly invites a response, which is a good strategy for closing such a letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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