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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
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The pie charts give information about the proportion of
water
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 consumption for three types of purposes in different areas around the world.
It is clear that
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 in most areas
such
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 as SOUTH
AMERICA
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, AFRICA, CENTRAL
ASIA
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, and SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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, agriculture was the major
water
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usage
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. As for NORTH
AMERICA
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 and EUROPE, both primarily used
water
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 for industry. Looking at the information in more detail, NORTH
AMERICA
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 and EUROPE showed a similar proportion of
water
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usage
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, with 48% and 53% allocated to industry, respectively.
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, domestic
usage
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 ranged between 13% and 15% in both regions. Agriculture
usage
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 of the former constituted 39%,
while
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 the latter area accounted for 32%. In terms of SOUTH
AMERICA
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,
the
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agriculture consumption was seven times as much as industry
usage
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, and
the
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domestic
usage
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 was 19%.
Moreover
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, CENTRAL
ASIA
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, AFRICA, and SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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 exhibited similar percentages of the three types of purposes, especially in
the
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domestic consumption. CENTRAL
ASIA
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 and SOUTH EAST
ASIA
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 both constitute 7% of total
water
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usage
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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