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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart illustrates shares of expenditures for five categories (
Food
, Housing, Transportation,
Health
care
, and Clothing) in different countries ( United States, Canada, United Kingdom, and Japan) in 2009.
Overall
, it is seen that shares of expenditures for housing,
food
, and transportation in all given counties showed
high
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a high
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 rate compared
the
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to the
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 categories for
health
care
 and clothing. With regard
food
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to food
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, Japan had
a
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the
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 highest rate among
four
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the four
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 countries.
This
 figure was approximately 23%
..
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.
...
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 United States witnessed less than 15%
while
 they had
a
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the
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 highest figure for housing, reaching a peak of about 26%.
Although
 Canada was over 15% in
food
, housing, and transportation, they accounted
a
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for a
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slight part
for
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of
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health
care
 and clothing. In the case of
health
care
, except for the percentage for
United
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the United
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 States, all three countries recorded less than 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, health, care with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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