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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories amongSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories amongSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The amount of money that UK citizens put into Food and drink,
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 and, entertainment in different
age
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 groups is illustrated in the bar chart.
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, it is visible that the percentage of spending among the 5 available
age
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 groups fluctuates frequently. People who are under the
age
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 of 30 spend the most in restaurants and the least in food.
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, the amount of money spent on food experiences a gradual increase among other
age
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 groups becoming the most important expenditure of people above 7. The first
age
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 group has Restaurants as their top investment which has less popularity amongst other
age
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group
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groups
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 and and is the least priority of the
age
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 group 61-75. entertainment as the
last
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 analyzed category occupies a more steady proportion of all
the
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UK citizens and is the most popular among people from 61 to 75.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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