The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK ( expressed in percentage terms).

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK ( expressed in percentage terms).
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK ( expressed in percentage terms).
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provide
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the figures
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tourists to England who visited Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.The attractions compared are
art
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gallery
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,
pavilion
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,pier and festival.
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1910 to
2010
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2010,
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there were wild
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except
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festival
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moreover
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art
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gallery
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and
pavilion
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effects fluctuated wildly
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contrast,were upward.
Pavilion
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tourists illustrate consistent growth, during the 1980s and 1990s there was a from 28% to 48% and
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to 31% in 2010.There was a sharp up in 1995. Visitors gained rapidly from 22% to 37 %
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1980 to 1985 ,by nearly 10% to
art
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gallery
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galleries
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.The festival trend
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by 5% over
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thirty
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.
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the pier trend
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from 10% to 25%
however
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, there has been a slight upward between
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the 1980s
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to 2010%.The
least
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proportion of visitors
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at an
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an
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pier and festival,
the
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and the
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highest proportion
in
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to
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art
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the art
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gallery
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and
pavilion
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery, pavilion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • digital divide
  • accessibility
  • ubiquitous computing
  • smart home devices
  • telecommunication
  • multi-purpose gadgets
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • obsolete
  • trend analysis
  • consumer electronics
  • statistical data
  • percentile growth
  • demographics
  • chart interpretation
  • gadgets
  • integration
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