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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #percentage #british #people #money #charity #age #range #years #summarise #features #comparisons
The given bar chart highlights information on the proportion of British
floks
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folks
flocks
 giving
money
 to
charity
 by different
age
range
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ranges
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 for the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, from the
age
 of 18 to more than 65
age
group
 donate their
money
 to a
charity
 .In 1990,
age
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the age
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group
 of 36-50 donated
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of
money
 and in 2010, it
is
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was
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 done by
51
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the 51
show examples
-65
age
group
. In 1990,
money
 from
18
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the 18
show examples
-25
age
group
is
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was
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 the lowest and highest is fron people ‎‫مas more than 40%
individuals
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of individuals
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. In
age
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the age
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group
 of 26-35 and more than 65 the people who had given
money
 to
charity
 are almost equal. Nearly 42%
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of peopl
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peopl
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people
 had donated their
money
 to
charity
 from
51
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the 51
show examples
-65
age
group
.
Further
, in the year 2020, very
fee
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few
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floks
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folks
flocks
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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donated their
money
 to
charity
 from
age
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the age
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group
18-25.35%of
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18-25.35
indivduals
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individuals
 had given
money
 from 36-50
as well as
older
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those older
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 than 65
age
 to
charity
 .Less than 25% of people from 26-35 ag and less than 40% of
public
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the public
show examples
 from 51-65
age
 had donated
money
 to
charity
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, charity, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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