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The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the different levels of both male and female
students
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' qualifications in Australia in the year 1999. The unit on the X-axis is shown in
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
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 the figure, it can be seen that the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 by male
students
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 is the highest compared to the other levels.
On the other hand
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, females in
this
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 level occupy the lowest. In the year 1999, the majority of male
students
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 attended to the Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 which
wasaccounted
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was accounted
has accounted
 for 90%. The Postgraduate
Diploma
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 came the second place with 70%.
Moreover
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, the Undergraduate
Diploma
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 was not interesting to male
students
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 with roughly 35% of male
students
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 in the program.
On the contrary
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, There was a reversed trend in both Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 and Undergraduate
Diploma
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. Female
students
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 most likely enrolled for the Undergraduate
Diploma
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 which was about 70%.
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 only 10% of female
students
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 decided to attend to skilled vocational
diploma
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.
Additionally
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, the Bachelor's
Degree
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 of females were almost the same as males, the gap between the genders was only 5%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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