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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The three pie charts illustrate the comparisons between
world
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 and 2 countries in terms of
food
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consumption
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. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 processed
food
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 is the highest
consumption
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 in the
world
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 and
also
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 the two countries.
On the other hand
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, Nuts and seeds have the lowest percentage in the
world
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 and
India
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, meanwhile apparently animal
food
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 in
China
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.
To begin
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 with, Processed
food
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 is accounted for 41%, becoming the highest
consumption
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 in the
world
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 It is
also
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 similar to
China
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 and
India
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 for 34% and 39%, respectively.
Consumption
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 of nuts and seeds in the
world
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 is lower than the two countries, only 4% compared to
China
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 5x times and
India
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 at 11%.
Likewise
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, Vegetables and fruits in
China
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 are only 15% the smallest amount rather than in the
world
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 ,approximately one-fourth and
India
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 27%. Animal
food
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consumption
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 is the lowest in
China
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, food, consumption, india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • average consumption
  • worldwide
  • data
  • comparison
  • differences
  • similarities
  • food items
  • categories
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • majority
  • minority
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