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You recently travelled with a certain airline. Write a letter to the manager about your experience. Please say – Where and when did you travel? – What did you like or dislike? – What can you suggest for improvement?

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Dear Sir or Madam The reason I am writing to you is regarding the I gain experience during to travelled by your airline. In
fact
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a friends
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a friend
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 of mine persuaded me to
utilized
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 your posh and reputable airline,
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 reason I set off on a journey to Canada on 13 March 2020 at 9:30
p.m
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p.m.
 by your airline. The first malfunction that I
notice
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 was
that
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The breakdown of the air conditioning system WC , Your staff evaded my responsibility and postponed its
resolve
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. regrettably
cearted
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created
started
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displeasing atmosphere inside
airlin
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. I discovered
anther
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another
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 problem
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 treatment staff was intolerable with individuals . I was very surprised
for
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puny
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 amenities in
such
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reputable
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airlin
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airline
. As a solution I suggest
for
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you, you should
boom
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 job performance through
educations
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such
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 hospitality, punctuality and… by
acceptable
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 educational
center
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. Yours faithfully. Farhad Ansari
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grammar
Try to proofread your letter for any spelling or grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
organization
Clarify the main points by splitting your thoughts into more distinct paragraphs.
sentence structure
Use more varied and complex sentence structures to improve the flow and readability of your letter.
content
You effectively communicated your experience and were able to give suggestions for improvement.
tone
You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for writing to a company's manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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