You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
I am writing
this
letter to inform you about some gravest
concen
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concern
. I am Sezal working in your company as computer engineer since
last
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july
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July
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. I have taken
this
job because I wanted to upgrade my skills and gain some professional experience
to
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in my field that would be lucrative for my future.
However
, all the staff members including me have encountered some issues that need your assistance. The sweepers are not doing their job properly.They come late on their duties and
donot
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do not
bother to clean the vicinity properly. Most importantly , they are rude and indolent. Despite having so much warning, their behaviour is unchanged.
Subsequently
, I humbly request you to address my concern and take some strict actions in order to teach workers about punctuality and professionalism. I would be grateful
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this
benevolent act of you. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely,
Sezal
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Seal
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greeting and closing
Ensure to address the receiver of the letter more formally at the beginning for a more professional touch.
single idea per paragraph
To improve clarity, focus on constructing your paragraphs around a single main idea, ensuring easier readability and understanding.
complete response
While your response to the task is quite complete, adding more specific suggestions or expected outcomes can further enrich your letter.
general
Keep practicing your written English for minor grammar and spelling improvements.
task achievement
You have communicated your concerns and requested action in a clear manner, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your letter includes a logical flow of ideas, contributing to its overall coherence and cohesion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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