The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts illustrate the global average disproportionately high rate with processed
food
consumption in 2008, based on two countries: China
and India
Overall
, it is interesting to note that, the proportion of fruits
in china
and animal Capitalize word
China
food
in India
, more
than Add a missing verb
is more
rates
of Correct article usage
the rates
world
. Add an article
the world
However
, after analyzing all 3 pie charts, all of them haveCorrect article usage
a
food
the
second highest followed by vegetables and Add a missing verb
being the
fruits
.
First of all, individuals of the world
, as well as
the
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apply
China
and India
, had
eaten processed Wrong verb form
have
food
more than any other food
item. Persons ate almost 41% processed
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of processed
food
in the world
in 2008. NeverthelessThis
percentage was higher in Correct your spelling
The
India
than China
. On Change preposition
in China
an
average, 29% Correct article usage
apply
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of vegetable
vegetable
and Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
fruits
were absorbed by the world
population while
this
percentage was 32% in China
and 23% in India
. Foods from animals were the third largest consumed item and Indian
ingested more than the Fix the agreement mistake
Indians
world
average. Nuts and seeds
consumed in India
and China
were much higher than the world
average.
Secondly
, is worth noticing that Indian
devoured more animal foods than Fix the agreement mistake
Indians
Chinese
did Correct article usage
the Chinese
while
Chinese
devoured more vegetables, Correct article usage
the Chinese
fruits
and seeds
than Indians
. Correct article usage
the Indians
Thus
, on an
average, Correct article usage
apply
Indian
population Correct article usage
the Indian
consumed
more animal foods and Wrong verb form
consumes
seeds
items than the Fix the agreement mistake
seed
world
population while
Chinese people ate
more Wrong verb form
eat
vegetable
and Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
seeds
than the rest of the world
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