The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

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The pie charts illustrate the global average

food

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consumption in 2008, based on two countries:

China

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and

India

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Overall

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, it is interesting to note that, the proportion of

fruits

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china

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China

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and animal

food

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India

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is more

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than

rates

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the rates

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world

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the world

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However

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, after analyzing all 3 pie charts, all of them have

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disproportionately high rate with processed

food

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the

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being the

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second highest followed by vegetables and

fruits

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. First of all, individuals of the

world

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as well as

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the

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apply

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China

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and

India

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had

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have

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eaten processed

food

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more than any other

food

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item. Persons ate almost 41%

processed

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of processed

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food

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in the

world

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in 2008.

NeverthelessThis

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The

percentage was higher in

India

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than

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China

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in China

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. On

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apply

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average, 29%

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of vegetable

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vegetable

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vegetables

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and

fruits

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were absorbed by the

world

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population

while

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this

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percentage was 32% in

China

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and 23% in

India

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. Foods from animals were the third largest consumed item and

Indian

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Indians

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ingested more than the

world

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average. Nuts and

seeds

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consumed in

India

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and

China

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were much higher than the

world

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average.

Secondly

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, is worth noticing that

Indian

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Indians

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devoured more animal foods than

Chinese

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the Chinese

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did

while

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Chinese

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the Chinese

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devoured more vegetables,

fruits

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and

seeds

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than

Indians

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the Indians

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Thus

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, on

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apply

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average,

Indian

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the Indian

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population

consumed

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consumes

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more animal foods and

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seeds

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seed

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items than the

world

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population

while

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Chinese people

ate

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eat

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vegetable

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vegetables

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and

seeds

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than the rest of the

world

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, china, india, fruits, world, seeds with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

219 words

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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limited number of participants. Write a letter of interest state your position in the company explain why they should include you in the training Explain how training could benefit you and your company.

childhood obesity has now becoming more and more popular

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

A lot of places in the word rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern word. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?