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Team/group activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#team #group #activities #skills #life #disagree？
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I like reading a
book
. When I was a little daughter I read a
book
. My parents have a library and when I know they were read.
Book
 is of my life light. When wake up in the morning
book
 is on the table and when I sleep at night on the table, too. I did not have time that I was away from the
book
. And I never had time to be disappointed in my life.
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Structure
Consider structuring your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion to enhance logical flow and clarity.
Relevance to Prompt
Address the prompt directly by stating your position on whether you agree or disagree with the statement about the value of team/group activities versus solo activities.
Support and Examples
Use examples and arguments to support your opinion on team/group activities versus solo activities, linking back to the essay question.
Grammar and Syntax
Review basic grammar rules and aim for sentence variety to improve readability and coherence.
Personal Engagement
Your passion for reading shines through, suggesting personal engagement with the topic.
Potentially Relevant Content
Mentioning a habit of reading provides a starting point for developing arguments related to learning and skills development.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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