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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The bar graph gives information about the expenditure on three groups among various
age
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 categories of inhabitants in the UK in 2004.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the food and drinks portion had a stable difference between
age
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 groups, and the least difference between each domain was in the 31-45 group. Looking into detail, the young
people
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 who
have
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are
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age
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 under 30
years
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 old spend their money on meals and beverages at nearly 5%. It was a gradual increase in every
age
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 group and reached around 23% for
people
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 76
years
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 old and above.
Similarly
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, citizens
that
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apply
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spending on their money in terms of entertainment rose significantly and reached a peak in the
ages
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age
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 group 71-75
years
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 old at 23% before dropping to just below 15% in the
people
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 76
years
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 old and above.
In contrast
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, the total expense of restaurants and hotels has the highest value in
people
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 under 30
years
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 old, comprising
of
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apply
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14%.
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, it went down slightly in citizens
in
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aged
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age
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 31-45
years
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 old and stood the same with the
people
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 around 46-60
years
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 old at just above 10%.
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, it declined in 61-75 aged
people
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 at just below 5% before increasing in
community
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communities
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 76
years
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 old and above around 6%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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