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The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The given pie charts shows the proportion of British students able yo use languages other than english. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given charts show the figures for British
students
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 at one England university who had the ability to speak other languages
in addition
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 to English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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 it can be seen that the vast majority of
students
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was
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 people who spoke Spanish only in both 2000 and 2010.
To begin
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 with, the proportion of
students
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 speaking Spanish only held the lion's share with 30% and 35% in 2000 and 2010 respectively.
On the contrary
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, the
students
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 speaking German only occupied 10% of the total of
students
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 in both the period of time in question.
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, the percentage of people who were able to speak only English in 2010 was less than twice that in 2000. Moving on to the other categories, the figure for
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 speaking only French in 2000 was more than 5% in 2010, with 15% for the former and 10% for the latter. There were always 10% of
students
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 in 2000 and 2010 who had the ability to speak two other languages except the languages mentioned above.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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