The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, the bar chart shows the
number
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of aged people working in four countries Australia, Japan, the USA and Belgium during the period 1970 and 2000. The percentage of men
workers
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in Australia during the time 1970 was 74 per
cent
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and in 2000 it was reduced to 47 per
cent
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. Japan have the highest
number
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of
workers
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with 84 per
cent
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and in 2000 it decreased to 76 per
cent
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. The USA was the
last
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country which had a lower
number
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of
workers
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compared to other nations with 73 per
cent
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after that during 2000 it was reduced to 55 per
cent
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. And Belgium was the
last
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country it was in the second nation with 79 per
cent
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and after 2000 it had only 19 per
cent
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of aged men
workers
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. Australia had 18 per
cent
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of women
workers
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during 1970 but in 2000 it increased to 19 per
cent
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. Japan had 43 per
cent
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of
workers
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in 1970 and in 2000 it was reduced to 40 per
cent
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. The USA had 36 per
cent
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of
workers
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in 1970 and it increased to 38 per
cent
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. Belgium had the least
number
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of women
workers
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between 1970 and 2000 with 8 and 7 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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