The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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men
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employment
four
countries
in 1970 and 2000.
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men
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countries
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Australia
australia
74% Change the capitalization
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to 2000
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compared
japan
84% in 1970 to 76% in 2000, in Capitalize word
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usa
73% in 1970 to 55% in 2000 and in Correct your spelling
USA
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79% in 1970 to 19% in 2000.
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Belgium
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these
four
countries
compared to men
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a small
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of people worked
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working
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aged 60-64.
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Australia
australia
18% Change the capitalization
Australia
women
worked in 1970 Change preposition
of women
compare
to 2000 it increased to 19%, in Wrong verb form
compared
japan
43% in 1970 to 40% in 2000,
in Capitalize word
Japan
usa
36% in 1970 to 38% in 2000 and in Correct your spelling
USA
beigium
8% in 1970 to 7% in 2000.Correct your spelling
Belgium
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