The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 3 years 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 3 years 2005, 2010, 2015. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given chart
indicate
Change the verb form
indicates
show examples
the section of
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
show examples
learning to play
Correct your spelling
different
differents
diffents
Correct your spelling
different
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
show examples
of musical
Correct your spelling
instrumental
instumental
Correct your spelling
instrumental
in the year 2005,2010 and 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
, the piano and guitar
are
Verb problem
have
show examples
increased in
popularlity
Correct your spelling
popularity
,
while
Linking Words
drum and violin experience varying
indemand
Correct your spelling
in-demand
demand
. Especially, piano and guitar
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
recived incressed
Correct your spelling
received increased
intention from
approximarely
Correct your spelling
approximately
12% in 2005 to 34% in 2015.
Similarly
Linking Words
,
the
Change preposition
with the
show examples
guitar there has been a noticeable
increse
Correct your spelling
increase
fromestimate11% in 2005 to 26% in 2015. Both
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
musical
instrumental
Replace the word
instruments
show examples
clearly gained considerable popularity over the years.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, the drums represent relatively smaller
chages
Correct your spelling
changes
charges
thoughtout
Correct your spelling
throughout
the period,
mantaing
Correct your spelling
maintaining
managing
the
amout
Correct your spelling
amount
less than 10% in both 2005 and 2015. The violin
also
Linking Words
demonstated
Correct your spelling
demonstrated
atomic
reduce
Replace the word
reduction
show examples
, with a slight decline
from10
Correct your spelling
from 10
% in 2005 to 5% in 2015.
Submitted by np.napatping on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • instruments
  • musical
  • trend
  • popularity
  • proportion
  • significantly
  • fluctuation
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • evolution
  • decline
  • consistent
  • notable
  • ranking
  • statistical
  • learners
  • paraphrase
  • bar chart
What to do next:
Look at other essays: