You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Wrik a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work. say what you want the shop or company to do.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to you to draw your attention towards the Dell laptop that I recently bought from
your
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one of
stores
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located in Orchard
park
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in
kelowa
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two weeks ago. It was working properly for a week. After that, I was having trouble
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to turn
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it on. It was shutting down on its own . I was pretty surprised how
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the latest model of
well-known
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institution is faulty. I am working remotely as a college student. I have to attend classes, work on assignments and many other things.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
,
this
device is giving me
hard
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time
to complete
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my tasks on time. I have ongoing a few projects at the current moment. I am totally dependent on
this
laptop to finish my work before
deadline
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.
Finally
,
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the Warrenty
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Warrenty
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warranty
of
this
item is still valid. what I would like the
dompany
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company
to
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do
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is provide
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me
a
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new laptop or I will be happy to get a replacement as soon as possible. Thank you for giving your attention to
this
matter. Please let me know If need any
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information. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours
faith fully
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, Maninder
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Spelling
Ensure to proofread your letter for minor spelling errors such as 'dompany' which should be 'company' and 'Warrenty' which should be 'Warranty'.
Details
Consider providing a specific model or purchase date of the laptop for more precise identification by the company or shop.
Content
You have effectively described the problem with the equipment and how it's impacting your work.
Structure
The structure of your letter, with clear introduction, explanation of the issue, effect on your work, and a closing request, is well-organized.
Tone
You've maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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