You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts given illustrate the proportion of occupation based on gender with
range
of age from 60 to 64 in Australia, Japan, the USA and Belgium between 1970 and 2000. Add an article
a range
Overall
, the percentage of man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
declines
significantly in 2000 compared to 1970 Wrong verb form
declined
while
the portion of women shows the opposite.
In 1970, the four countries reveal
that Wrong verb form
revealed
man
aged 60-64 in employment are more than 70%. Fix the agreement mistake
men
For example
, in Japan
84% were hired in 1970 Add a comma
Japan,
and
Correct word choice
which
become
the highest rate Wrong verb form
became
on
Change preposition
of
employement
at that time. Correct your spelling
employment
Likewise
, Australia, the USA and Belgium show a portion of 74%, 73% and 79% respectively. However
, these number
Change the determiner
numbers
were plummetting
in 2000.
Wrong verb form
plummeted
Women
occupancy booked a different trend, which is Change noun form
Women's
show
Wrong verb form
shown
the
contrary. The ratio of women Change preposition
to the
with
the same age range Change preposition
in
with
Change preposition
as
Add an article
the man
a man
man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
were vary
from 8% to 43% in 1970. Change the verb form
varied
However
, this
number remain
stable in comparison to other Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
gender
. All of the countries Fix the agreement mistake
genders
shows
a Correct subject-verb agreement
show
slightly
increase and decrease at the same timeChange the adverb
slight
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