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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart describes the habits of
people
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 in five Australian cities buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea. It is obvious that in all five
countries
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, the
proportion
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 of
people
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went
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who went
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 to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 almost doubled the percentage of
people
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bought
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who bought
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 fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 in all 5
countries
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,
while
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 the
proportion
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 of
people
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bought
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who bought
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 instant
coffee
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 ranked at the middle. Looking into more details, among all 5
countries
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, around 63% of
people
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 in Melbourne went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in
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last
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the last
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weaks
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weeks
, which is the biggest percentage. Hobart ranked
the
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apply
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second place at 62% and Sydney ranked
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apply
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third at 61%.
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, only 34% of
people
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 bought fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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, which took the
least
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lowest
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proportion
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 among 5
countries
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. Followed by 34% in Adelaide and 37% in Hobart.
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, comparing the
proportion
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 of citizens
bought
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who bought
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 instant
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 in 5
countries
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, Brisbane
own
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has
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 the
most
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highest
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proportion
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 of
people
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. It is
also
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 worth noticing that
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, countries, proportion, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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