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As social media continue to develop, more and more youngsters have unsupervised access to all the contents available over the internet in order to meet and chat with friends and even strangers, which can lead to some potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

#media #youngsters #access #contents #internet #chat #friends #strangers #situations
The modern
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 technology has so many
advance
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 features to meet up
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new friends
by
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online
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platform
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. Teenagers are using a lot of internet websites to interact with
the
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random people which
lead
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 them
some
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 hard situations.
This
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about
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 how we can deal with
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 problem in upcoming paragraphs
such
 as by
ban of
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the
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websites and
by introduce
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 hard punishment. To commence with the first
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, first and foremost the website has
violence
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content
 should be banned. Young generations are using
a different websites
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different websites
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 to meet with each other by using
internet
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the internet
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 and there are no restrictions on the
content
of using
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 by everyone. There
are
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 some
content
such
 as gun wars which is one of
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affect
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a
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them a lot because
in
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teenagers are crazy about
the
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guns
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content
.
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, students are using a game named Pubg for interaction
to
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due to
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lead
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 to
the
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violence
as a result
 of
this
 a boy killed his friend because he did not provide him weapon in
game
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.
Therefore
, to reduce the trouble of teenagers
these
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content
 should be banned. Moving forward with
second
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,
government
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 needs to introduce the hard punishment who
misuse
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 the technology and uploading the
content
 which affects the
you
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people.
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, pornography is banned
is
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 some nations because people using a lot to meet with new pupils and they do
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financially
as well as
 physically.
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,
government
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 need to introduce hard punishment
such
 as
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 prison or heavy penalties
in
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them
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.
To conclude
, no doubts there are
different
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solution
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of
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this
 problem but I believe putting a ban on and introducing the
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prisnment
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imprisonment
 by
government
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the government
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 will
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helpful
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 to get rid of
this
 dust.
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