The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
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The bar charts present the fraction of
people
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of both genders and different ages who either watch
reality
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shows or game shows in Australia.
Overall
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, it can be seen that males mostly enjoy watching game-related programs but females are likely to choose
reality
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as their main program on TV.
However
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, both genders tend to watch programs when they are getting older. A majority of women in Australia prefer to watch
reality
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plays which is about 70%
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men occupy only 30%.
People
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with age higher than 45 years old are keen on watching
reality
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plays which totals 70% as same as
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in 35-44 years old who almost have the same number at just under 70%. 25-34 and 16-24 represent 60% and well over 50% respectively.
On the other hand
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, Australian men and women decide to watch game displays which account for 70% almost the same number.
People
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with 45+ number at 70% and 16-24 comes the second place with 50%. Followed by 35-44 and 25-34 with 40% and well under 40%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, reality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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