The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
Contained in the illustration is the information comparing the popularity
between
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two types of TV programs in terms of
genders
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and age
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in Australia. From an observational perspective, existence shows are more popular with women
while
men are more familiar with game shows.
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,
45+
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age party enjoy these kinds of shows more than any other
group
. Looking at the first chart in
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40% and 70% respectively. For the 16-24 crowd, 50% of them observe
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shows and the percentage rises as their age increases. The 45+ association dominate
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with more than 60% seeing reality programs. Turning to the second graph, the percentage of men watching games is slightly higher than that of women, at 60% and 57% in the following order. The 16-24
group
experiences 50% of them enjoying game shows
whereas
the 25-44
group
shows little interest in these programs. The 45+
group
once again outnumber the rest with a 70% rate of viewers.
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