In some places, money earned from tourism has become an important part of the economy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of replying on tourism as a major source of revenue.

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Tourism become a splendid source for a
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to boost
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its economic growth.
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of tourists gathering
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historical and other
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that contribute their money to that nation where they are spending it
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while
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this
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concern
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its drawbacks
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put a shadow on both merits and demerits
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conclusion. On the one hand, there are various factors involved that bring
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on society. The main advantage of
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trend
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, it will enhance
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country's
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wealth. To explain it,
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country
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like India has been becoming
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place nowadays for outsiders in case of visit its historical and traditional
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which leads to a good business among other nations.
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,
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will be incredible for its
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growth.
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, it is paramount for
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well- being
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socities
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society
.
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tourists travel through different countries they come to know about
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traditions and ethics which they will start promoting
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while
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they are following it.
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, there is not any statement without its negative side.
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scenario has its
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demerits
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which
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be ignored
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it
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badly
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security and privacy issues. To put it simply, countries facing obstacles like
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thieves
and more life threats for
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own citizens like people who are visiting different
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have not
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motives to visit. To explain it
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, some
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terrorists
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tourist
and after they are
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attacked
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public
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to fulfil their aim. In conclusion,
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there are multifarious aspects that have positive consequences about
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tourism
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country
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the country
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but
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i
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think it
shoud
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should
be planned with proper security.
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Task Response
You have made an attempt to cover both the advantages and disadvantages of tourism for economic growth, which is crucial for task completion.
Topic Understanding
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Paragraph Structure
Some paragraphs show good structure and an attempt to organize ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Economic diversification
  • Tourist influx
  • Hospitality sector
  • Eco-tourism
  • Cultural commodification
  • Environmental degradation
  • Revenue stream
  • Cultural heritage
  • Service industry
  • Economic stimulus
  • Market volatility
  • Gentrification
  • Carrying capacity
  • Cultural assimilation
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