The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.

The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.
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pie chart illustrates how the different
type
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types
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of
energy
power changed in French households over the
10-years
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10-year
period
Overall
, it can be seen that the percentage of coal was highest throughout the period.
By contrast
, the proportion of other elements was lowest. In 1995, the percentage of coal
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first accounted
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29,80%
total
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energy
manufaction
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manufacture
in France. The rates of gas and
petro
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petrol
was
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slightly lower at 29,63% and 29,27% respectively. Meanwhile, only 6% of total
energy
production belonged to Nuclear. In 2005, the proportion of coal was highest at 30,93%. The figure for gas rose slowly to 30,31%
while
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production witnessed a
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fall of nearly 10% to only 19,55%.There were sharp increases in the figures for Nuclear and Other types of
energy
to 10.10% and 9.10% respectively.
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