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The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.

The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.
The
given
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apply
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pie chart illustrates how the different
type
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types
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 of
energy
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 power changed in French households over the
10-years
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10-year
 period
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of coal was highest throughout the period.
By contrast
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, the proportion of other elements was lowest. In 1995, the percentage of coal
rank
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ranked
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 first accounted
by
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for
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 29,80%
total
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of total
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energy
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manufaction
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manufacture
 in France. The rates of gas and
petro
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petrol
was
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were
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 slightly lower at 29,63% and 29,27% respectively. Meanwhile, only 6% of total
energy
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 production belonged to Nuclear. In 2005, the proportion of coal was highest at 30,93%. The figure for gas rose slowly to 30,31%
while
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petro's
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Petro's
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 production witnessed a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 fall of nearly 10% to only 19,55%.There were sharp increases in the figures for Nuclear and Other types of
energy
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 to 10.10% and 9.10% respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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