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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: •say which part-time course you booked •explain why you need to cancel your booking •ask about booking a different course You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam..........,

#course #college #administrator #•say #•explain #•ask #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I am Harmanpreet Kaur and
student's
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 Business Management
in
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 your college. I am writing to find out about my part-time
course
 which I booked
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apply
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last
 week.
Along
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, now I want to change
it
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apply
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with
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to
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 another
course
. To explain it, my friends
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me
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apply
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,
you
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that you
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 take admission in
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the Automotive
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 Business so I registered my name in
this
course
 but after two days, I realised dissatisfaction
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 it because I do not have
interest
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 in
this
 field.
Therefore
, now I want to exchange it with another. To resolve
this
 problem, please help me
regarding
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 choosing
new
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course
 which
also
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 suitable
with
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 my current study. I would appreciate it if you could
it
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 for me. Thank you, yours Faithfully, Harjeet.
Submitted by harmanpreetkang20 on

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Task Achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task in a detailed and clear manner. Adding more information about why you chose the new course could strengthen your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on the clarity and organization of your ideas. Using paragraphs to separate different ideas can help improve the readability of your letter.
General
Be consistent with the name used in the letter. The sign-off name is different from the one used at the beginning.
Positive Language Use
You have politely expressed your request and demonstrated understanding of the need to communicate changes.
Structure
The overall structure of the letter follows a logical sequence, addressing the situation, the reason for change, and a request for assistance.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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