The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
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a comparative analysis of the
units
of
electricity
by fuel source in
Australia
and
France
in 1980 and 2000. The total
production
in both countries increased during the period, with the
figure
of
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Australia
raised
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from 100
units
in 1980 to 170
units
in 2000,
while
France
doubling
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its 1980
figure
in 2000 to 180
units
in total. More precisely, in
Australia
, coal
comprising
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half of the total
production
in 1980, with
oil
, natural
gas
and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
sharing the rest 50
units
, with 20
units
, 20
units
and 10
units
respectively. In 2000, the
figure
of
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coal raised dramatically to 130
units
, with
hydro
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hydropower
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power
incresed
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increased
slightly to 36
units
.
Conversely
,
oil
and natural
gas
produced much less
electricity
than before, both contributed 2
units
repectively
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respectively
.
Situation
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The situation
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was different in
France
. Coal,
oil
, natural
gas
and nuclear
power
evenly shared the total
production
, with each around 20
units
in 1980. Two decades later,
electricity
produced by nuclear
power
grew significantly to 126
units
of an
overall
180
units
, about 3/4 of the whole. Meanwhile, the
figure
of
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for
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oil
and coal remained stable, with
hydro
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hydropower
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power
and natural
gas
drop
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dropping
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dramatically to 2
units
each.
Overall
, the
electricity
production
pattern in both countries varied during the two decades, with
France
adopted
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adopting
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cleaner energy sources,
while
Australia
sticked
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stuck
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to the traditional way of
electricity
production
.
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