The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The bar graph illustrates how many
volunteers
and
workers
in 4 kinds of roles
of
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sports
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the sports
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sector in
an
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Australian
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Australia
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in 2015. It is noticeable that the
most
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proportion of
volunteers
worked as a coach,
whereas
the number of referees was the lowest in the
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figure
.
Overall
, only the paid
workers
,
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career was referee, was higher than
volunteers
'.
To begin
with, around 72 unpaid people took on coaching, followed by other sections, approximately 60
volunteers
. The figure for volunteer therapists was half of that in coaching, with almost 45
volunteers
,
while
only about 30
volunteers
became referees. Nearly 50 paid
workers
preferred to work in other sections, which was marginally higher than the number of paid coaches (over 40 people). The figures for
workers
in
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and referee sections witnessed almost no clear distinction, as each welcomed more or less 40
workers
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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