the table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

the table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
The table compares monthly expenditures in various contexts among five different
countries
.
It is clear that
all
countries
have
a
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the
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same position for clothing and entertainment costs approximately. The UK is the most expensive location for settling among other
countries
besides
,Germany has the lowest point for eating.
First,
France, Germany and the UK spent more budget on accommodation
then
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than
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other items with 31%, 33% and 37% for each
countries
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country
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. Turkish people devoted
main
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the main
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part of their income
for
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to
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meal
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meals
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(36%)
while
Germanic citizens spent 22%
for
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on
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food.
Garment
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The garment
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portion
have
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has
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a negligible difference between France and Spain and it is just 1%
also
Turkey,
UK
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the UK
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and Germany paid 12%, 11% and 15% respectively. German people
with
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apply
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shelling out 19% for entertainment stay at the highest part of the chart
however
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, Turkey is at the lowest place
by
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at
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10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Household income
  • Allocate
  • Basic necessities
  • Expenditures
  • Essentials
  • Economy
  • Living conditions
  • Standard of living
  • Cultural significance
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial prioritization
  • Noticeable trends
  • Unusual allocations
  • Society's values
  • Economic status
  • Illustrates
  • Highlights
  • Comparison
  • Analyze
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