the table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
The table compares monthly expenditures in various contexts among five different
countries
.
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It is clear that
all Linking Words
countries
have Use synonyms
a
same position for clothing and entertainment costs approximately.
The UK is the most expensive location for settling among other Correct article usage
the
countries
Use synonyms
besides
,Germany has the lowest point for eating.
Linking Words
First,
France, Germany and the UK spent more budget on accommodation Linking Words
Linking Words
then
other items with 31%, 33% and 37% for each Replace the word
than
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countries
. Turkish people devoted Change to a singular noun
country
main
part of their income Correct article usage
the main
for
Change preposition
to
meal
(36%) Fix the agreement mistake
meals
while
Germanic citizens spent 22% Linking Words
for
food.
Change preposition
on
Garment
portion Correct article usage
The garment
have
a negligible difference between France and Spain and it is just 1% Change the verb form
has
also
Turkey, Linking Words
UK
and Germany paid 12%, 11% and 15% respectively.
German people Correct article usage
the UK
with
shelling out 19% for entertainment stay at the highest part of the chart Change preposition
apply
Linking Words
however
, Turkey is at the lowest place Add the comma(s)
, however
by
10%.Change preposition
at
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