The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian people who did regular physical activity in various age groups by
genders
in 2010.
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gender
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that females did more physical activity compared to males. Furthermore
, men were more likely to do physical exercise between the ages of 15 and 24.
Looking into detail, in 15-24, while
the percentage of meb doing exercise was 52.8, the figure for women was just below 50%. However
, females between 25 and 34 were more willing to sports activities than males, 48.9% and 42.2%, respectively. Likewise
, the proportion of women between 35-44 was higher than men with 52.5% and 39.5%, respectively.
In terms of older people, from 45 to 64
the percentages of women doing physical activity were almost the same around 53% and the figures for men were approximately equal( just above a half). Add a comma
64,
Moreover
, the figures for both genders in
65 and over were roughly equal (just below one in two).Change preposition
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