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You will be celebrating your son’s 8th birthday next week. You want to invite one of your colleagues to attend the birthday party. Write an invitation letter to this college. In your letter, invite your colleague to your son’s birthday party give details of the party and its date and time say how happy you and your family would be to have him/her at the party

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Dearest Tate, I am very good and I hope you are doing well. I am bothering you to invite you and your family to my son's 6th birthday
party
. Which is very important for him. You know weekends are not our working days
for
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this
 reason we are going to
orginize
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organise
 the
party
 next week's weekend at 7 p.m
in
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 my home. I will send you
location
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for
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against every extremism.
In addition
 to
this
party
 will has
a
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plenty of
foods
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 and enjoyable games for you and your family and
also
 we invited very
well known
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 singers and
blogers
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bloggers
 like Adamw. We are
prepareing
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preparing
 so hard for the
party
. We will be extremely happy if you give us some time because we have been
workin
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working
 in the same company for ages so we are like family, all of my family members would love to see you
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 the
party
. I wish all good wishes to you. Mike
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coherence cohesion
Use clearer transitions between ideas for smoother flow.
task achievement
Clarify details like the exact date for the party to improve task achievement.
task achievement
Consider using more formal or appropriate expressions when writing to a colleague.
task achievement
Good job including key details about the party and expressing enthusiasm for your colleague’s attendance.
coherence cohesion
Polite and friendly tone in the greeting and closing is appropriate.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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