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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the company – describe the item lost – explain how you lost it – tell the insurance company what you would like them to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: accelerat Dear Sir or Madam, Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in regard to the travel insurance that I paid for on my recent trip to
the
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Canada. The missing item was my wedding ring. At that time ,I
could
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 not able to find the ring and
was
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waited till we checked our
baggages
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baggage
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 but
unfortunately
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 it was not there
even
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. It was
24 carat
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 gold ring studded with white stones and valued
as
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 4000 dollars. I might lost my ring at
hotel
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the hotel
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. We tried calling
hotel
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 and got our room checked but they mentioned that nothing was being found.
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, I had a vivid memory of wearing the ring during the flight. But when reached home, the ring was definitely missing. Since we paid for the travel insurance
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it should be responsible to cover any missing valuable item. I would like to request you to issue us the cost of the missing ring and will able to show all the proof of the bought ring and some pictures of the ring if requested. Please draw your immediate attention to
this
 issue. Yours faithfully, Saniya Kalsi
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General
Ensure consistency in tense usage throughout the letter for clearer timeline presentation.
Structure
You've effectively structured your letter, with clear paragraphs for introduction, details of the item lost, explanation of the loss, and the request to the insurance company.
Tone
Your respectful tone and polite request to the insurance company match the context of the letter appropriately.
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