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The pie chart below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.

The pie chart below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.
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The given pie chart and bar chart provide insights into the
consumption
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 of bottled
water
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 across different regions of the world in 1999 and how it evolved by 2001.
Overall
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, Asia emerged as the largest consumer of bottled
water
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 at the outset of the
period
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,
while
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 Western
Europe
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 and the USA showed relatively lower levels of usage. By the end of the
period
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, most regions (Asia, the Middle East, Africa, Latin America, New Zealand, Australia, and the USA) had experienced substantial
growth
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 in bottled
water
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consumption
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, except for Western
Europe
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.
To begin
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 with, the Middle East and Africa
initially
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 had low
consumption
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 rates, each accounting for only 5% in 1999.
However
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, by 2001, both regions had seen a significant increase of nearly 10% in bottled
water
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consumption
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.
Similarly
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, Latin America and New Zealand, which started at 10% and 13%, respectively, in 1999,
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 witnessed a comparable
growth
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 rate by 2001, each reaching approximately 13%. Equally obvious is that Asia led in bottled
water
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consumption
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 at the start of the
period
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 with 48%, maintaining its position by 2001 with a 14% increase.
In contrast
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, Western
Europe
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 experienced modest
growth
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 during
this
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period
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, around 3%. Notably, the USA showed a notable increase of nearly 8% in bottled
water
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consumption
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 in 2001, unlike Western
Europe
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, which saw comparatively slower
growth
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, water, period, europe, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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